Comic script

I'm making a script to work from that would be a similar, though scaled down, version of one a comic book artist would receive. I'm not the greatest writer in the world so please excuse any inconsistency. Yes this is just going to be a wall of text.

A Rake’s Progress

Page one:

Panel 1: Sunset black image of cactus and slouched figure. Caption:  ‘This wasn’t how it was meant to end.’

Panel 2: Move closer, sun lower bit of light on black image. Caption ‘I just wish there was a way I could of stopped this.’

Panel 3: Close up figure turns out to be skeleton leaning on the cactus. Caption ‘To show how this came to be we have to start at the beginning…’

Page two:

Panel 1: Inside a building, lighting coming through a window, otherwise dark shadowy. Tom speech ‘It’s time.’

Anne ‘Time for what?’

Panel 2: Close up of Tom. Black background. Tom speech ‘Time to get the train. It’s coming through town in thirty minutes.’

Panel 3: Behind Tom looking at Anne, otherwise similar to panel 1. Speech Anne ‘I thought we talked about this? You weren’t going to try anymore. You were gonna get a real job.’

Panel 4: Hand grabbing gun from table. Light from window hits near the gun. Tom speech ‘I know, but we need this. We need the money. This is the last one. I promise.’

Panel 5: Tom looking down the guns sights. Tom speech ‘Besides Father deserves what’s coming to him.’

Page three:

Panel 1: Large shot of western plains very open and dusty. Train in the distance.

Panel 2/3: Close up of train, steam engine. One carriage in shot ‘Father’s bank’ written on the side. Panel 3 is just the carriage split for emphasis.

Page four:

Panel 1: Top of cliff black figure on horse rearing up.

Panel 2: Behind black figure looking down at the train.

Panel 3: Running down the cliff/side on. Bright background and dust behind horse.

Panel 4: Horse turns at train tracks still very dusty.

Panel 5/6/7/8: Horse alongside train Tom stood on horse.

Page five:

Panel 1: Tom jumps from horse onto the side of the train.

Panel 2: Tom hanging on the side of the train.

Panel 3: Tom pulls himself up. This shot is from on the train as he pulls up. Make sure to get the motion of the train behind him.

Panel 4: Tom on top of the train opening a hatch.

Panel 5: From inside the carriage look at Tom through the now open hatch. Dark except for a gold/yellow tint.

Panel 6: Close up of Tom and the open hatch. Tom smiling. Speech ‘Gotcha!’

Page six:

Panel 1: Tom rushes inside. The door swings open. Tom holding gold bars. Speech Tom’ I’ve done it! We’re rich, we’ll never go hungry again.’

Panel 2: Behind Tom looking at Anne. Speech Anne ‘Really? You managed to get it?’

Panel 3: Tom putting a bar in her hand. Tom ‘We can do anything.’

Page seven:

Panel 1: Tom at a poker table gambling. Caption 'Tom quickly let the money run to his head.

Panel 2: Tom sat with a women on his lap.

Panel 3: Tom at a bar, drunk.

Page eight:

Panel 1: Tom stumbles through a door. Speech ' WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN?'

Panel 2: Anne's angry face close up. 'I've been up all night waiting for you. So answer me!'

Panel 3: Tom leaning on a table. speech'I don't need you I don't need anyone.'

Panel 4: Tom leaving the house. Speech 'Fine. You're on your own stay out.'

Panel 5: Tom walks out of town. Caption 'when he left we never saw him again'

Panel 6: shadow leaning in a cactus like page 1.